Film I'm Writing/Producing

[violet]

This might be a bit off-topic, but I just created a blog-site for a film I'm writing/producing, and I was wondering if the story, layout, presentation, visuals seem appealing. If you have a few moments to check it out and let me know what you think, I'd be eternally grateful!


listofthingstodobeforewedie.wordpress.com/

[Jeff Messerman]

Well first off, Adriana, 1000 congrats on so many levels. You're taking that mighty leap into indie production. I've been there a few times myself and it's always exciting, always daunting, more than a little terrifying, and never boring.

A lone country hydrant, a Dollar General, and a winding road to nowhere. Looks like I'll be first in line for this one. You're barking up my kind of territory.

I hope I speak for all of us when I say if there's anything we can do for you here in the GITS Club, just let us know. If I remember correctly, you posted your logline or some pages here recently... I'm still catching up on all my reading around here but I'm sure I'll get to your stuff too.

Good luck and please do keep us posted on your trajectory to a completed film!

P.S. - get that paypal button up on your site so I can get my name in the credits!!! I'm an egomaniac, the more I see my name on the big screen, the better!

[echenry]

Adrianna,

Clearly you are creative, as your endeavoring to make a film . Your film's website SHOULD be a showcase of your creativity. Currently I think you need MASSIVE AMOUNTS of changes on your website.

1) On your header lose ALL the slashes (/) and go with something simple like:

Manifest Destiny: a romantic comedy that road-trips across America.

"... a film/love affair/mix tape/journey/adventure/myth/road-trip..." makes it sound like you're not sure what this product even is .

2) Chose a better centerpiece picture which captures the spirit of your story. To me your current picture suggests a biker's gang tale, as your current picture shows the back of a guy on a motorcycle! .

3) In the "ABOUT THE FILMMAKERS" section you really need to show us a picture doing something film related . Also in your description of yourself you need to get us feeling more that your in control and motivated. Right now your description of yourself makes you sound like a total dreamer, who lacks the chops to pull a project like this. What are your long-range plans? Your dreams? At least give us that!

4) Rewrite your "THE FILM" description. Try to take out all "ing" verbs and replace them with present tense verbs.

5) Completely change the focus of "GET YOUR NAME IN THE CREDITS" section to making a drive for money so people can contribute to a film they believe in. Get a Pay Pal link put in there, and then tell donors that their generosity will be remembered in the closing credits in something like a "CONTRIBUTING PARTNERS" tribute section.

6) Spruce EVERYTHING UP with pictures. Show pictures of locations. Show head-shot pictures of actors and actresses who are going to be playing in the film. Right now your website doesn't have near enough pictures.

* This webpage should be a SHOWCASE of your CREATIVITY, Adianna. Who you are should be DIRECTLY REFLECTED in this webpage if you're serious about using it to promote your film. And right I don't think you've put your best foot forward. If I were you, I'd shut the webpage down and re-vamp it so that it's more exciting, and more of a reflection of who you and what your vision is for what this film could be.

- E.C. Henry from Bonney Lake, WA

[attatt]

I think it's a great idea you've got going there, but I would also suggest boosting the level professionalism a bit. It does not look like you take the blog too seriously to me, which is very common, but if you want to be taken seriously as a movie maker you have to take it to another level to stand out.