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Post by Delson on Feb 2, 2011 1:25:40 GMT -5
An internally non-violent medical soldier fights in the Afghan War in 2020 and transforms into an iterant prophet who opposes the American Empire and creates a new philosophy though his sacrificial death.
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Post by mscherer on Feb 2, 2011 7:04:30 GMT -5
Delson,
Love to give you some of my time and help you out, but first take some of your time to register as a member
Thanks.
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Post by delson9030 on Feb 2, 2011 11:41:43 GMT -5
Mscherer,
This logline post is mine. Sorry for the confusion.
Regards,
Delson
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Post by mscherer on Feb 3, 2011 6:59:05 GMT -5
Delson,
Not sure what ‘internally non-violent’ means. And iterant means repetitive. I think the word you were looking for is itinerant. The part about the American Empire need not be in the logline, you can bring that out in the story. Anyway, on to the logline…
Interesting concept. Sort of a post-apocalyptic Jesus wandering across Afghanistan. Let’s simplify…
During the Afghan War of 2020, a troubled Afghan soldier transforms himself into an itinerant prophet of non-violence and through his death, changes the world forever.
Okay, maybe not so great, but I think you get the idea.
One man’s opinion – mileage may vary – batteries not included.
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