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Breathe
Nov 28, 2010 21:29:44 GMT -5
Post by parablestoday3 on Nov 28, 2010 21:29:44 GMT -5
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Titanic in outerspace.
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oz
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Breathe
Nov 28, 2010 23:23:01 GMT -5
Post by oz on Nov 28, 2010 23:23:01 GMT -5
Okay, Parable, I'll bite. What? Is 'Breathe' the title? 'Titanic in outerspace' is an idea but hardly measures up to a logline. No different than saying 'elephant in tree'. It may pique interest but it doesn't tell us anything. Is it a ship as in a boat? Is it the 'unsinkable' spaceship that gets 'sunk' by an asteroid? Are there people involved? I'm assuming since you mentioned breathing there must be at least one person but who is it and what is the struggle and who or what are they up against? Water in space? Needs work, my friend. But that's what we're here for.
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marc
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Nov 28, 2010 23:58:39 GMT -5
Post by marc on Nov 28, 2010 23:58:39 GMT -5
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Nov 29, 2010 1:27:22 GMT -5
Post by brianhaas on Nov 29, 2010 1:27:22 GMT -5
That's a concept, not a logline. And, on its face, not a particularly convincing concept. What, is it an "asteroid-proof" starship that smashes into an asteroid? Not sure that it would work.
But anyway, a logline needs to tell what the story is, not just what your concept is. We need a protagonist and a problem.
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