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Post by ryancito on Nov 16, 2010 6:28:20 GMT -5
A DISTURBED YOUNG MAN, HAUNTED BY A VIOLENT PAST, WAKES UP TO DISCOVER THE LINES OF REALITY AND FANTASY HAVE VANISHED AND NOTHING IS AS IT SEEMS.
my question is this: Does the logline sound interesting enough and is the title Epiphany too vague or simply lame???
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Post by mscherer on Nov 16, 2010 7:54:42 GMT -5
ryancito,
Ok, back on my soapbox…. A logline should, IMHO, offer at least four (4) pieces of information:
1. Who is the protagonist?
2. Who is the antagonist?
3. What is the situation?
4. What are the stakes?
This logline only answers two of the four: protagonist and situation.
We need to know: who is the antagonist, the bad-guy, our hero’s nemesis?
We also need to know the stakes. It is all well and good that the ‘… lines of reality and fantasy have vanished…’ but what does this mean for your hero? Are there life and death consequences? Is the world at risk? All of humanity?
Answer these two questions, sharpen the concept, and then, yes, the story will sound interesting enough.
Keep Writing!
Ps: worry about the title later. Epiphany works for now.
pss: I took the liberty of deleting your duplicate post.
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