The Amazing Dreamship Adventure

[pzeidman]

I'm having a little trouble getting this to sound exactly right, so any feedback is welcome and appreciated.

Thx

Title: The Amazing Dreamship Adventure
Genre: Fantasy-Adventure

A teenager must rescue his little sister after she's kidnapped by the sinister beings who deliver nightmares to children; if they don't return home by sunrise, they'll be trapped forever in the mystical place where dreams come from.

[supermikhail]

I don't see what your problem is. Unless you want the acronym to make sense. Although if you include the article, it is good, too.

Maybe "amazing" sounds a little cheesy. Would 'The [protagonist's name]'s Dreamship Adventure' sound better? Or just 'The [protagonist's name]'s Adventure'? Actually, now that I think of it, it appears to be a rule that child stories' titles include the names of protagonists. If your, I assume, screenplay is in the child category, you could go with that. It's somewhat generic, but it depends on the protagonist's name.

Whoops, I'm stupid. Except The Toy Story, The Ice Age, The... a lot of stuff. Well, anyway, my two cents.

[mscherer]

pzeidman,

Have to admit this was a tough nut to crack ;D

Try this on for size:
A cynical teenager struggles to rescue his annoying little sister from an sinister being, who delivers nightmares to children, before they are trapped forever in that place where bad dreams are created.

Consider it a springboard to a bigger and better logline.

Keep Writing!

[tous]

Hey I love the log line. Sorry, I don't have any input for it, but I just wanted to say that it reminded me a lot of this independent movie called "INK" by Jamin Minans

check it out its incredible.