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Post by jonnyhopper on May 8, 2010 17:22:54 GMT -5
Hi folks, This is my first submission here - a short entitled "That Time The Moon Blew Up". I hope you enjoy it, and I'd love any feedback you have to offer! Thanks, J. Attachments:
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Post by mscherer on May 8, 2010 18:05:10 GMT -5
Jonny,
Well done!
An absurd situation with funny, funny, funny, dialogue. ;D
What's to criticize?
Keep Writing!
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Post by jonnyhopper on May 9, 2010 7:02:30 GMT -5
Thanks for your kind words - Glad you enjoyed it!
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Post by glengarry on May 27, 2010 1:16:16 GMT -5
Big fan at first but it kind of peetered out at the end. There must be a clever way to cap this more quickly.
Think it's a lot of fun until we start passing time. maybe it's possible to keep everything in one moment from beginning to end.
i really like the sirens and helicopters and neighbors getting out of doge. Just think you could think bout how this could end more quickly and humorously. has a BEER COMMERCIAL quality to it.
BTW, loved the Bill Murray joke. It is a JOKE right...? No worries. I'll google it.
Good stuff!
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