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Post by masternorken on Aug 17, 2011 2:43:34 GMT -5
So I want to review what I have written. I'm starting with my logline. Later I will post my script.
Logline:
A terminally ill demon hunter seeks to enlist a beautiful private investigator into his ranks as he tries to nab a demonic terrorist
Thanks in advance
Jesus Loves U
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Post by Sean Z P Harris on Aug 17, 2011 7:27:49 GMT -5
Howdy!
As Mike Scherer, the head honcho here, would probably say, a logline needs convey at least four pieces of information:
1. Who is the protagonist? 2. Who (what) is the antagonist? 3. What is the situation? 4. What are the stakes?
You seem to have the following:
1. A terminally Demon Hunter. 2. Demonic Terrorist. 3. Must enlist the help of a beautiful private investigator to help capture a Demon terrorist.
I think what you’ve missed out is the stakes, and I’m not sure what I’ve written here for section 3 truly reflects what the situation is.
I’d try and figure out what the stakes are first.
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Post by mscherer on Aug 17, 2011 13:51:37 GMT -5
Sean,
Right On! (showing my age there ;-)
Keep Writing!
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Post by masternorken on Aug 17, 2011 18:00:52 GMT -5
Thank uuuuu. Can't believe I missed that, (kicking self)
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